! ! Is Music Mute The Poem's Ripened Fruit?

In a smart burnoose, Khadour looked on, amused; it suited him, to pick the choicest fruit from market stalls, comparing each with all and, smiling, then point out the Eastern style allowing customers to choose what must be brought to table straightway, and what ought to be allowed to ripen a degree; and so, politely indicate the sin of thinking that the West were always best… [An experiment in five-stress lines internally rhyming the first, second or third foot with the last (fifth) foot; as an alternative to end-rhymes.. The first line is from Elizabeth Bishop, which promoted the experiment..; comments on the effect? or better, try it yourself? ]